Moved and Unmoved by G and H

Sample G:
Moved
1. There is an abundance of supporting examples.
2. There is a strong thesis statement.
3. There are references to different fact sources from sports to science.
4. It has a specific voice about it that makes you believe what is being presented.
5. Mentions things like the fast pace of our society, thirst for energy, and instant gratification, which all define our culture.
6. There is a strong conclusion.

Unmoved
1. There is no mentioning of the negatives of the energy drink.
2. The diet version isn't specified in the diet section.
3. Calories and nutrition facts are not included.
4. No specific people are mentioned.
5. There aren't direct quotations linked to a speaker.
6. The addiction and socially inappropriate nature of the drink isn't highlighted.

Sample H:
Moved
1. There is an abundance of statistics.
2. Numbers are featured in the opening paragraph, which attracts the attention of the reader.
3. This paper in concise, but fairly thorough.
4. Great detail is used in the points set forth.
5. Focuses on trend of iPods.
6. Branches and highlights Podcasts (different from my iPod essay).

Unmoved
1. This essay lacks a stress on music and it's importance and cultural connection.
2. It fails to feature any personal experience.
3. It does not touch on applications much.
4. It does not give information about the origin and invention of the iPod.
5. It gives little sense of personal interest.
6. There are not many links to current society and American culture.